Comments on: A DISTANT SOIL: The Ascendant Chapter 2 Page 5

By: Colleen Doran

Colleen Doran — Fri, 30 Sep 2016 04:15:53 +0000

UPDATED.

By: mamid

mamid — Thu, 19 Nov 2009 03:08:56 +0000

I’d love an El-Ron. But I won’t qualify for one of those till next year’s V-Con.

By: Colleen

Colleen — Thu, 19 Nov 2009 00:55:50 +0000

Allan, you’re so funny. You SLAUGHTER me!

@Mamid: good point, I just think it would sound more euphonious had I chosen a different word.

By: Allan

Allan — Wed, 18 Nov 2009 22:49:51 +0000

Does mamid get a No-Prize?

By: mamid

mamid — Wed, 18 Nov 2009 16:36:09 +0000

I don’t think it is redundant. She’s talking about two different slaughters: The Choosing, where hundreds of kids are killed because they aren’t useful or perhaps even “dangerous” and the slaughter committed on various worlds where they enslave races.

By: Colleen

Colleen — Wed, 18 Nov 2009 16:16:56 +0000

LOL! I totally slaughtered that line! What a slaughter! Slaughtery slaughter!

By: scribblerworks

scribblerworks — Wed, 18 Nov 2009 15:49:20 +0000

Regarding the redundant line — you just had a lot of slaughter on your mind, and you wanted to make sure the readers didn’t forget that pile of dead children, all slaughtered by cold-hearted slaughter.

😀

It could be worse, Colleen. But it isn’t. 😉

By: Colleen

Colleen — Wed, 18 Nov 2009 05:13:56 +0000

I just realized there is a redundant line in panel 4, and there is no reason for Beys to have 2 word balloon pointers in the last panel. I may tweak that in the next collection.

Funny what you see later.